Feedback from professional

In class today we had a professional come in and comment on our work of what he thought of it.
I had some useful tips on how to improve my piece such as the following:

• Edit the title scenes or known as the scenes with writing in them, to all have the same font. 
• change alarm sounds as they are too noisy and take away the ambiance of what is happening. 
• make the sound the same throughout.
• cut out some bits, such as at the start after my main character falls out of bed to cut the rest of it out.
• to have a more show of 'the bully' and 'the outsider' to be more dramatically seen, as at the moment it comes at the bottom of the scene for about 2 seconds.
• when i have a clip saying 'Change is coming' maybe i should change it to some different writing of 'this could happen to anyone' however he felt this wasn't critical and it doesn't need to be changed that much as he likes my original idea. 

He felt the good things about the trailer was:

• good editing
• having a clip after the title of action was good.
• the music fits the piece very well.